Before we make our final decision on your application, we would like a revised personality section and first-person sample for Roxas. We feel that while the current personality section demonstrates a number of his traits in isolation, this overview is somewhat superficial and does not adequately explain how his canon has affected and impacted him as a person. We also feel that the section does not sufficiently explain fundamental aspects of canon that are directly relevant to Roxas's character, which causes the section to read as overly generic. In the revised section, we would like to see a more in-depth look at how Roxas's experiences have shaped him as a person, as well as further elaboration on what makes him a distinct and identifiable character in his own right.

We also feel that the first-person sample is generic, and would prefer a sample that more clearly demonstrates who Roxas is as a distinct and identifiable character. In the revised sample, please feel free to tailor the scenario as you see fit to show off Roxas's unique traits as a person. You will have one week to complete these requests before the character is available again.