Before we make our final decision on your application, we would like a revised personality section for Bertholdt. While his existing personality section tells us a great deal about what Bertholdt has done and said, we would like to see a more in-depth look into how those canon traits define him as a person. In your revised sample, we'd like to see more reliance on analysis of Bertholdt's qualities that uses his history to support them, instead of the other way around. You will have one week to complete these requests before the character is available again.