Before we make our final decision on your application, we would like a revised personality section and first person sample. The personality draws too heavily on history; this is fine when used to further the analysis of the character’s personality but shouldn’t take up the majority of the section. We would like to see altogether more focus on her personality and a more in-depth explanation. In addition to this, the personality seems to contradict the strengths/weaknesses in places – the personality section describes her as having become confident but the weaknesses listed suggest otherwise. The first person sample is generic and doesn’t show her voice very clearly – you might to consider putting her in a different situation to better showcase her voice and personality. You will have one week to complete these requests before the character is available again.