Before we make our final decision on your application, we would like a revised personality section. While we see a character voice in the samples, we’re not getting a clear description of her or what circumstances she comes from and we’d like to see a more thorough analysis of her personality, behavior and mindset.
As an aside, due to the lackluster information on your canon, we’re going to need a longer time to judge your app – don’t be alarmed if this takes a few days.